Your Own Poetry - Page 5

Synful_Poet · April 24th, 2012, 01:17 AM

So this is a first for me. I've never shared this side of my poetry before.

From the depths of hell he reaches out
to corrupt all those with doubt.
He pulls them in and drownds them under,
the souls of thousands he does plunder.

Not caring where the darkness lies
as long as he sees it in their eyes.

He damns them, damns them into the abyss
where fires rage and serpents hiss.
They twist with torment from hour to hour
knowing they've lost all power.

Not caring where the darkness lies
as long as he sees it in their eyes.

Jennifer23 · April 28th, 2012, 10:55 PM

Syn, that's really good! I read it twice and liked it even better the second time. I wrote one for class in 10th grade and our teacher told the other kids to read it and tell everyone what the meaning behind it was. They all had different ideas about what I was saying, but in truth . . . it was nonsense. Here it is, if I can remember:

Is like the stream a thought of when
or who the tree will there;
maybe not a knot or two,
or why the what will stare.

The rain will reign or live in time
and love the silent cub;
The Sun the same or ban the can
and knight the Kingdom dub.

Well, I was in 10th grade! I do like my knight the Kingdom dub line though.

Synful_Poet · April 29th, 2012, 04:00 AM

Yeah, I'd have to say that's probably the best line. It's not bad for nonsense. That's one thing I love about poetry, two people can read the same poem and it can be a completely different experience for both.

Jennifer23 · April 29th, 2012, 02:03 PM

Es la verdad. (it's true)

wdrwm · May 20th, 2012, 03:35 AM

I just went through something really emotional, and im not the kind of person to write poems at every tear shed i used to actually try to imitate dr. seus books with it's happy whimsical tone but idk why this time i just felt i had to write my it all out. Hope you guys like it.

To be utterly, completely, wholeheartedly mine
To destroy, remold, influence and refine
You refuse to comprehend
my thoughts to hell you send
My dear doll of mud and clay
The puppeteer's string instead you play
Like water on rocks, my definition erodes
Once a grip so strong, now where do I hold?
Recklessly I pedal off my stool
Becoming the pawn to a smart fool
Trying to regain my hands and cut my 'claim'
or at least follow resistancelessly to pain

Synful_Poet · May 22nd, 2012, 11:26 PM

First- Welcome to WOW, wdrwm!

Wow, that was really moving. It's a very relatable piece. Very awesome.

Jennifer23 · May 27th, 2012, 05:40 PM

Well done, wd. And it came from your heart.

Elusive Unicorn · January 6th, 2013, 11:20 PM

The crazy world spins
Sometime it seems like you can not win.
Down but never out
That is what life is about.
Every day a new lesson learned
Always hoping that your heart will not get burned.
Some things are tragic
Others may be magic.
Take the time out to see what is new
The world if you look has a great view.
Never give up hope.

Wolf_angel · January 7th, 2013, 11:44 AM

I like it! Very motivational and inspiring too! Hugs

June Dare · June 29th, 2013, 10:01 PM

I like your poem. I don't know what the heck some of these other people are saying!! June Dare

June Dare · June 29th, 2013, 10:03 PM

I don't know how this works. I was trying to comment on another poem and it just disappeared?? June Dare

June Dare · June 29th, 2013, 10:10 PM

Loved this poem . June Dare

April 24th, 2012, 01:17 AM	#61
Synful_Poet Member Join Date: Apr 2012 Location: IA Posts: 540	So this is a first for me. I've never shared this side of my poetry before. From the depths of hell he reaches out to corrupt all those with doubt. He pulls them in and drownds them under, the souls of thousands he does plunder. Not caring where the darkness lies as long as he sees it in their eyes. He damns them, damns them into the abyss where fires rage and serpents hiss. They twist with torment from hour to hour knowing they've lost all power. Not caring where the darkness lies as long as he sees it in their eyes. __________________ "Once made equal to man, woman becomes his superior" - Socrates

April 29th, 2012, 04:00 AM	#63
Synful_Poet Member Join Date: Apr 2012 Location: IA Posts: 540	Yeah, I'd have to say that's probably the best line. It's not bad for nonsense. That's one thing I love about poetry, two people can read the same poem and it can be a completely different experience for both. __________________ "Once made equal to man, woman becomes his superior" - Socrates

May 20th, 2012, 03:35 AM	#65
wdrwm Member Join Date: May 2012 Posts: 1	the puppeteer I just went through something really emotional, and im not the kind of person to write poems at every tear shed i used to actually try to imitate dr. seus books with it's happy whimsical tone but idk why this time i just felt i had to write my it all out. Hope you guys like it. To be utterly, completely, wholeheartedly mine To destroy, remold, influence and refine You refuse to comprehend my thoughts to hell you send My dear doll of mud and clay The puppeteer's string instead you play Like water on rocks, my definition erodes Once a grip so strong, now where do I hold? Recklessly I pedal off my stool Becoming the pawn to a smart fool Trying to regain my hands and cut my 'claim' or at least follow resistancelessly to pain

May 22nd, 2012, 11:26 PM	#66
Synful_Poet Member Join Date: Apr 2012 Location: IA Posts: 540	First- Welcome to WOW, wdrwm! Wow, that was really moving. It's a very relatable piece. Very awesome. __________________ "Once made equal to man, woman becomes his superior" - Socrates

January 6th, 2013, 11:20 PM	#68
Elusive Unicorn Member Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: Utica,NY Posts: 806	The crazy world spins Sometime it seems like you can not win. Down but never out That is what life is about. Every day a new lesson learned Always hoping that your heart will not get burned. Some things are tragic Others may be magic. Take the time out to see what is new The world if you look has a great view. Never give up hope. __________________ Any and all typos I may make are in the name of science. My tests will be conclued when ever I get around to it.

April 28th, 2012, 10:55 PM	#62
Jennifer23 Jennifer23 Join Date: Dec 2010 Posts: 3,187	Syn, that's really good! I read it twice and liked it even better the second time. I wrote one for class in 10th grade and our teacher told the other kids to read it and tell everyone what the meaning behind it was. They all had different ideas about what I was saying, but in truth . . . it was nonsense. Here it is, if I can remember: Is like the stream a thought of when or who the tree will there; maybe not a knot or two, or why the what will stare. The rain will reign or live in time and love the silent cub; The Sun the same or ban the can and knight the Kingdom dub. Well, I was in 10th grade! I do like my knight the Kingdom dub line though.

April 29th, 2012, 02:03 PM	#64
Jennifer23 Jennifer23 Join Date: Dec 2010 Posts: 3,187	Es la verdad. (it's true)

May 27th, 2012, 05:40 PM	#67
Jennifer23 Jennifer23 Join Date: Dec 2010 Posts: 3,187	Well done, wd. And it came from your heart.

January 7th, 2013, 11:44 AM	#69
Wolf_angel A survivor of chaos Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: Where my heart is Posts: 3,147	I like it! Very motivational and inspiring too! Hugs __________________ May you walk in the shadow of the Great Spirit~To help others is a special gift we can either give or take~The more you give the more you receive~

June 29th, 2013, 10:01 PM	#70
June Dare June Dare Join Date: Mar 2012 Posts: 11	I like your poem. I don't know what the heck some of these other people are saying!! June Dare

June 29th, 2013, 10:03 PM	#71
June Dare June Dare Join Date: Mar 2012 Posts: 11	I don't know how this works. I was trying to comment on another poem and it just disappeared?? June Dare

June 29th, 2013, 10:10 PM	#72
June Dare June Dare Join Date: Mar 2012 Posts: 11	about Di dying Loved this poem . June Dare